Peer Review Worksheet (Essay 1)

Writer’s Name: Karla Perez

Paper Title: Traditional Chicken Noodle Soup
Date: 04/06/2011
Editor’s Name: Karla Perez

Peer Review Worksheet

1.    Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?

·         The introduction is good and it is relevant with the topic that we want to compare. Also, the introduction shows and gives a general idea about the total essay.

·         The first sentence catches the attention of the lector because the topic is about chicken soup and we all know about this food.

2.    What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.

·         Thesis: “The things that have changed are the ingredients and the quality of ingredients people used years ago and the way we use them now.”

·         Suggestion: “The things that have changed in a chicken noodle soup are the ingredients and the quality people used years ago and the way we use them now that can really affects the flavor.”

3.    Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions?

·         Each paragraph has its main idea and is easy to identify because it is in the first sentence of each paragraph.

·         The main concepts in each paragraph are related to the thesis. Thesis is talking about the flavor of this food and each concepts explored are related to the thesis. The writer is using the concept “you need to go back to your thesis.”

·         The points of each paragraph are good and also they support the main idea of each paragraph.

4.    Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

·         Be careful with the grammar and spelling.

·         Be careful with the past and present tense.

·         Sentences are clear and simple which sometimes is good because you can catch the idea of the sentences.

·         Suggestion: Try to do not use conjunctions when you write an essay. For example: it’s, doesn’t, don’t, etc.  

5.    Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?

·         The sources that are using in the essay are relevant with the topic and there are clear, too.

·         The author uses her sources really good and also the write gives a work cited that is very important in an essay.

6.    What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.

·         In my opinion the paper are really good, the topic are really interesting because all people have been consuming chicken noodle soup and we can have a clear idea how this food has been changed over the years.

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